Natsuki Test Pages 1 and 2

This started off as a concept sketch to gather some ideas, and I ended up liking it more and more as I went along and it ended like this.

I have a dream project in mind and this is the beginning stages of that. I'm still a LONG way off from where I want to be, so consider this something of a preview? Or something?

Anyway, I'm looking for any and all feedback of any sort, since I can't grow and improve unless I know what I'm doing right and wrong!